User blog:IAmEmilyTheCat/Story for school, and please help!

Ok, I need some help, please read this story:

The Story of Ralts
Ralts was a young pokemon. Her mother was Gardevoir, father was Gallade and brother was Kirlia. Ralts was young and silly. Her best friends were Riolu, Bagon and Munchlax. “Hey Ralts, does your mom have any food? I’m hungry!!!” Munchlax was a large bellied pokemon, with a blue back and a gut that was never full. “I thought you just ate!” Riolu grumbled, the blue-black fighter annoyed at her fat friend. “Calm down Riolu, Munchlax just wants a bite to eat.” Said the calm-as-ever Bagon, a nice, strong pokemon. “Or a couple of large bites!” Ralts joked. Mrs. Lucario, Mrs. Gardevoir, Mrs. Salamence and Mrs. Snorlax were out for tea. So Mr. Gallade was watching the four friends. “Hey! It’s not my fault you guys never have any food when I come over!” Munchlax cried. “Hey, Isn't the school dance tomorrow night?” Ralts asked. “Didn’t Tyrogue ask you out to the ‘Pokemon Love’ dance?” Riolu asked. “He did!” Ralts said happily. “Oh! That reminds me” said Bagon. “Riolu, will you be my date to the dance?” Riolu froze, a smile on her face. But Ralts shot a look of pure hatred at Bagon. “Of course I’ll go! I have been waiting for you to ask me that since the day we were told about the dance!” Bagon smiled and replied “Oh good! I can’t wait to go with you!”. But as the three kids talked, Ralt noticed a frown on Munchlax’s face. He was crying a little bit, and then started to glare at Bagon. “No! Riolu, will you go with me ?” Riolu stopped, a shocked expression on her angular face. “I-I-I… I cant Munchlax, I’m sorry.” Bagon turned to look at Munchlax “Sorry Munch, but she picked me.” The argument was over. “Rio, Munch, Bago, let’s all go home.” Ralts told her pals. It was time for bed anyway. “Bye Ralts!” They all called together. Ralts waved bye to them and went home. Riolu and Ralts had never really been friends. She headed upstairs and went to sleep. The next day she went downstairs. Now let me tell you that Ralts likes fighting, but she can’t fight. She has always dreamed of fighting in the Big Battle. The Big Battle was the week where everyone  fought against each other. It was the day after tomorrow. Ralts had asked Kirila for help, but her stubborn brother refused. She was weak, un-evolved, and easy prey. The only place that you could not fight at was the Hospital. The Hospital was where Chansy healed pokemon. After being healed, you could leave the building and hurt more pokemon. It was scary. Ralts knew she needed help. But would her friends be there to help her out?

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