User blog comment:Ashleegreninja/The Pokemon That Changed/@comment-34252725-20180409160438

Ok I have a few questions to say and a few recommendations and a story idea

QUESTIONS

Are you speaking in another language? I'm pretty sure furre and sudo aren't English words although i think no one would mind that since you are translating it

What kind of introduction are you doing here? Starting off with that kind of a intro can only make you go directly to the story without introducing your protagonist without the viewer being confused on what's going on im not saying you should reset the intro since there is still a way of introducing yourself in that kind of intro. Well at least that's how i'll see it.

RECOMMENDATIONS

Keep it simple

Don't make the character too amazing (optional)

(I won't be righting the reason right now since it's 12 am and I don't have enough energy to right it but I'll right it tom... But I have enough for the story)

STORY

So since you went with that intro I visualize the story in 2 ways

1 its going to the crisis immediately then during the crisis it's gonna start introducing the protagonist or

2 it's gonna lead to the crisis then it will look like a vision after that he/she is gonna continue on his/her day which will lead to an adventure then maybe mid or late story that vision will come true, if it's mid story then you'll have a lot more room to make the story bigger if it's late then it will be kind of a cliff hanger where a season 2 will be certain.

You'll probably avoid this but I'll post it anyways since I think it should be out there.